|
|
Internationale Gedichte Sämtliche nicht-deutschsprachige Gedichte. |
|
Themen-Optionen | Thema durchsuchen |
02.11.2013, 20:53 | #1 |
You
Call me your destiny.
Call me your sin. Call me whatever you want. See me through the window See me through the darkness See me at the ground See me just as what i am. Tell me what you wanna be. Tell me all your sins and mistakes and tell me that you are hiding from your fears. Do whatever you want Do no harm to yourself Do something you need and something you are used to do So what about me? You never say a word Never look onto me Never cry ,never shout when i'm near I want to know about you I want to know if you are well I want to know what you are doing right now and tell me about your thoughts. Cause i'm your destiny. I'm your sin. I'm everything you want me to be. I'm calling myself your soul your conscience your thoughts your virtue and your mind. But i'm everything you want me to be. I'm just you. |
|
03.11.2013, 17:28 | #2 |
Sehr schön geschrieben
Hier und da würde ich vielleicht noch mehr auf Emotionen eingehen oder dieses "I am you" noch verstärken.. Und ich glaube es heißt "to look AT somebody/something" (nicht onto, oder meintest du into..? :$) Aber alles in allem schöner Text 😊👏 |
|
07.11.2013, 18:58 | #3 |
Sehr schöner Text :3
|
|