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11.03.2010, 18:19 | #1 |
Drowning
she knows, once she will have to learn
but from this point is no return now open door invites to leave she's panicing, she cannot breathe its over, ever was sche knows its dark and cold, the wind, it blows she cannot hear, she cannot see she wants to go, she wants to flee it has no point, she'll never make cause life's to fast, she can't escape in her own past she runs away tryes to forgett instead to stay and fighting down whats drowning her one day she's gonna dissaper because you cant escape your live your past, your thoughts, they will arrive as soon as you have sttled down fight on or you're gonna drown. |
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21.03.2010, 01:20 | #2 | |
Zitat:
several remarks: 2: ...there's no return... 3: ...is inviting her... [rather find some replacement] 4: ...panicking... 5: ?! 6: ...wind it is blowing... 9: ...make it a: ...she's running away... b: ...tries...forget instead of staying... c: ?! [a bit unclear] ...what's... d: ...she will... e: ...can't escape from... [or use flee instead or sth. alike] g: ...settled... Greetz |
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