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03.12.2019, 11:19 | #1 |
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Country Line
She is a true Country girl
Loving her, she is a little Country pearl He, she and they are fine Along the forest line You are the true friend To be with you is best Together through the forest Must say to be honest Cowgirl and Cowboy A great feeling to enjoy Don’t know why You aren’t a lie Her friendship is true To short, who are you A real friendship I can read it from her lip You sit next to me Understanding like a team With the supervisor One group, one time Long days, short nights A week, full of lights Week is full of sun With a lot of fun In my heart A little part of heart Part of everything Friendship in spring Place and go Fast and slow I enjoy with you the time See the week in a line Time to short The time with you, a friend You are the light You are very bright I like you and miss much A good friend, a friendship crush I like you That is true Hope I see next time It will be very fine |
05.12.2019, 17:15 | #2 |
Hi JH,
well well. I hope that you don't believe that this were either a great poem or awesome lyrics. These verses aren't both of it. Reasons: (a) They are a metric chaos. (b) The content is an uninspired assembly of platitudes and banalities rephrased so often that even a country enthusiast would run off. What does that mean? I suggest you try writing good poetry in German at the beginning. With that suggested I am strongly pointing at reading well-done poetry first and then publishing your tries second. Good thing is that there is hope. No-one is a great poet at the very beginning; all of us have to undergo a hard time of tough criticisms - a lot of them hard to bear. stay tuned! best W. |
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05.12.2019, 17:44 | #3 |
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This is one of my first poems in English. Of course this isn't very good.
I usually i write German poems, but this was a first try to write an English poem. |
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