The World Tree

[JWagner]

With everything, a tie we share
What giant tree, beyond compare!

Upon its branch, I am a leaf
Down in his depths, only a thief

Beside his trunk, I am a maid
The eagle in the treetop stayed

A lively wellspring in the deep
A hungry deer, to him I leap

A giant with the force of earth
A cunning dwarf of humble girth

Down in the roots a toxic serpent
Incessantly gnawing, inadvertent?

Within its time, I'm but an hour
A spark within its boundless power

[Ilka-Maria]

Zitat von JWagner

...
Beside its roots, I am a maid
A bird so free in treetop's height
...
I am the serpent in the roots
Creeping decay, almost mute

Hm ... bei diesen beiden Zweizeilern haut es mit den Reimen nicht hin.

[Eisenvorhang]

Zitat von Ilka-Maria

Hm ... bei diesen beiden Zweizeilern haut es mit den Reimen nicht hin.

Ja, er könnte es vermutlich wie folgt lösen:

Beside its roots, I am a maid, (unsicher wegen jambus)
in treetops high, like birds, I’ve strayed.

Beside its roots, I am a maid,
in treetop’s realm, my dreams are laid.

I am the serpent, roots are deep,
in hush I slith’, in silence creep.

(slither / slith / gekürzt)

[JWagner]

Danke für die Anregungen!! Ich habe die Stellen umgearbeitet!