I need you

[Hoot]

das ist mein erstes fremdsprachiges gedicht. ich hab es gestern in den 9. Stunde (Latein, bähh!) verfasst und seitdem nichtmehr angerührt. Sagen wir mal, es ist noch eine "Rohfassung"...


I need you
Why I´m feeling so blue
Everytime I´m thinking of you?
It´s difficult to understand,
Sometimes life doesn´t make sense.
I think of you both day and night
Or anytime you´re out of my sight.
Standing here on the world ends shore,
I know I can´t live without you anymore.
Kissing you.
Missing you.
You are so close but also far away
And I´m praying for you to stay
With me.
Can´t you see?
You´re a part of who I am
It´s a damn
Destiny, we are fancy-free,
Aren´t we?
So I´m closing this letter
Hoping we will live some time in a better
Life together, filled with joy and happyness,
May you are blessed.


Wie gesagt, 9.Stunde, das merkt man schon (ganz kurz vorm einschlafen*lol*)

[Lilly]

Eine Frage: sollte es nicht "may you be blessed" heissen? Des Gedicht gefällt mir sonst ganz gut...

Lilly

[Hoot]

Ich habs nochmal etwas umgeschrieben...ein paar worte geändert und so...


I need you

Why I´m feeling so blue
Every time I´m thinking of you?
It´s difficult to understand,
Sometimes life doesn´t make sense.
I think of you both day and night
Or anytime you´re out of my sight.
Standing here on the world ends shore,
I know I can´t live without you anymore.
Kissing you.
Missing you.
You are so close but also far away
And I´m praying for you to stay
With me.
Can´t you see?
You´re a part of who I am,
Damn!
We are free,
Aren´t we?
So I´m closing this letter
Hoping we will live some time in a better
Life together, filled with joy and happyness,
May we will be blessed.


Ich denk mal,jetz klappts auch mit der grammatik besser...