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08.04.2015, 01:12 | #1 |
I am
I am cold water in a jar,
clear and dirty. I am mad. I trick you, nightly, funny, bad. I’m nothing, all, a ball, a scar. I am silence of the death, quietly I steal your mind. Can’t you see me? Are you blind? I’m the latter breath. I am a screech, I am the calm, you find me in some people’s heart. I am the light, I keep you warm, our force is like a card, I’m like a storm and cut your side apart. |
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08.04.2015, 21:32 | #2 |
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Dear Jana,
a wild and dangerous wind rips through your poem. Might be the breath of love and death... I think the line "I am the light, I keep you warm" is in contradictory to the statement of the poem which appears somehow morbid to me. Love Rosenblüte |