Erster versuch an Texten

[SeriousBug]

Hey community, ich hatte vor circa 15 mal Lust, mal eine Art Gedicht/Text zu schreiben. Dies ist mein erster Versuch und ich habe den Text kaum überarbeitet also hoffe ich auf eine Menge Kritik.

Out were the waves make a grave of the sea

The pain makes you brittle, the loss hits you hard
Who was it that shoved a knife through your heart
Sobbing and melting due to burning questions
It's taking your mask off; revealing expressions

You showed your feelings, it's your true self
But was it really them or did you do it yourself?
They may not see, they may not know
How you faced death and the by dead now

The one that you miss whom face you remember
In every detail, your loved one, remember?
The scars you can feel, they made them real
Every day, every night, you dream that they'd heal

But no, life is brutal, the pain doesn't stop
At trying to fix it you fail, more often than not
All hope is lost, you don't feel like living
What's been keeping you going has now gone missing

[Thing]

Hallo und willkommen!

Ich geb Dir einen freundlichen Rat:

Laß das Gedicht in diese Rubrik

Internationale Gedichte Sämtliche nicht-deutschsprachige Gedichte.
verschieben.


Feiertagsgruß
v.
Thing