The burden of being lovely

[la tristesse]

I wish I was more self ashured
be more like you
to sometimes leave you ungreatfully
to sometimes make you blue.

Being unconcerned you love me
to unchecked be a part of you
being kept in your heart
in love with the strange things I sometimes do.

But I can't
cause I'm afraid
To loose you
to harm you
to wake another person
deep inside of you

To loose you
but to love you
when all I want to do
is amaze you

And now I stand alone
with the burden of being lovely
in the night, when it's dark
the moon shines in its beauty

I'm like your shadow
and I'll never walk on by
but when there's night and I've dissappeared
would you search for my light
would you even try?

[Lilly]

Also... ein wunderschönes gedicht, aber mir sind einige Fehler aufgefallen... und zwar: loose = locker... du meinst "lose"; "dissappeared" hat nur ein "s"; und assured, nicht ashured... sorry, aber ich musste des ausbessern... *smile* Is nicht böse gemeint =)

bye bye, Lilly

[Haumichblau]

in my opinion there are to many " you " in your lovely poem [ 16 ]

dear Lilly, solltest du irgendwelche Rechtschreibungsfehler bei mir finden? dann darfst du diese alle behalten.[ smile ]