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20.03.2014, 09:58 | #1 |
Always there
Nothing I see is true
Just a hologram of you Shadows stalking me by night Against old ghosts I always fight In my dreams you`re always there I wish I never ever care About your brown eyes and your smile I like to remember once in a while What happend days and weeks before Without beeing ashamed of me any more |
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21.03.2014, 14:41 | #2 |
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I'm impressed - you're really only 30 years old?
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21.03.2014, 17:12 | #3 |
Sarcasm?
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21.03.2014, 17:20 | #4 |
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No - I'm really impressed! At your age I made me not worry so much, mostly only lived in the here and now, was still "hippie". About life itself, I reflected only when my mother died - and then wrote a novel in which I tell about my journey through life, and he is called "Imagine - ...", was inspired by John Lennon and Bob Dylan ...
Greetings! Pedro |
21.03.2014, 17:36 | #5 |
Thanks a lot!
Hab hier schon einige weniger nette Kommentare erhalten, deshalb bin ich inzwischen vorsichtig :-) LG strubbel |
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21.03.2014, 17:51 | #6 |
R.I.P.
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21.03.2014, 17:53 | #7 | |
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Don't think twice about the stupidity of other people - it's only important to think about the own mistakes and errors ... Warm greetings! Pedro Video Bob Dylan "Don't think twice" > http://vimeo.com/39267368 < |
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30.03.2014, 17:24 | #8 | |
Here some minor advices that came through my mind..
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I'd rather suggest ghosts of the past Since the person of interest within the poem is gone already you might want to put the line 'I wish i never ever care' in a past tense like: I wish I never ever (really) cared Beyond that your poem is pretty well written, greetings |
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