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llewyngreendale · 23.12.2013, 01:02

Inside thee -

adore the dwell at the aged shore

Oh! This glee -

lie-down in this dale; less is more

Fade, indeed -

behold! maddening shadows collide

One heart beat -

among this bloom - I could have died

llewyngreendale · 24.12.2013, 16:25

Ich habe es nochmal überarbeitet:

Inside thee -
adore the dwell at the aged shore
Oh this glee -
ignore effort 'cause less is more
Fade indeed -
hide in shadows which collide
One heartbeat -
wide among this bloom – I could have died

Wäre dankbar für Kritik/Anmerkungen!

23.12.2013, 01:02	#1
llewyngreendale Dabei seit: 12/2013 Ort: Würzburg Alter: 32 Beiträge: 4 Meine Gedichte	Among this bloom Inside thee - adore the dwell at the aged shore Oh! This glee - lie-down in this dale; less is more Fade, indeed - behold! maddening shadows collide One heart beat - among this bloom - I could have died

24.12.2013, 16:25	#2
llewyngreendale Dabei seit: 12/2013 Ort: Würzburg Alter: 32 Beiträge: 4 Meine Gedichte	Überarbeitung Ich habe es nochmal überarbeitet: Inside thee - adore the dwell at the aged shore Oh this glee - ignore effort 'cause less is more Fade indeed - hide in shadows which collide One heartbeat - wide among this bloom – I could have died Wäre dankbar für Kritik/Anmerkungen!