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09.05.2009, 20:21 | #1 |
My Infinity
My Infinity
I never wanted to go back I never thought about the times Have passed I didn´t even look back The days Have passed I never cried about the moments lost But now where you´re gone I start to think about things I did wrong I wish I could start from new ´Cause there are so many mistakes I did Where does this road go to? I think it´s a road to nowhere I´m standing still Am I already breaking down? I don´t know I can´t just go on Because there´s just to much the time could never erase What might have been The reason? My tears don´t have fall My heart must not to be broken But all my feelings They don´t matter And now I´m lost Lost anywhere In nowhere |
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22.06.2009, 19:34 | #2 | |||
Inhaltlich gefällt mir dein Gedicht,doch da haben sich so einige grammatikfehler und Wörter die du wahrscheinlich versucht hast aus dem deutschen ins englische zu übersetzen reingeschlichen!Oftmals geht es gut mit dem vom deutschen ins englische wortwörtlich zu uebersetzen aber oft gibts im englischen dafür andere Wörter/Begriffe.. ;-)
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->I never cried because of the lost moments Zitat:
->I start to think about the things I did wrong(Klingt vielelicht besser,du kannst das the aber auch so wie du es geschrieben hast weglassen) ->I wish I could start from the beginning ->Cause there are so many mistakes i did/I have done...würde auch gut klingen ->Where does this road lead to?Oder here does this path lead to? Zitat:
->My heart shouldn't break...oder:Shouldn't have been broken from(Person)...weiß nicht genau was du da sagen willst!Das dein Herz nicht hätte brechen sollen oder das dein Herz nicht gebrochen werden soll von jemandem...? ->Lost somewhere ->In the middle of nowhere Viele liebe Grüße Chino |
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23.06.2009, 13:43 | #3 | ||||||
Some suggestions.
Please be aware of relative pronouns and of tense issues. Cheers, MovFaltin Zitat:
I never thought about (the) times gone by Zitat:
at days gone by Zitat:
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I am starting to think about what I did wrong Zitat:
For there have been so many flaws of mine Where does this road lead? I think it's a road to nowhere I am standing still Already breaking down? I don't know Zitat:
For there is far too much time shall never efface What might have been Its reason? My tears have not dropped yet My heart is not broken yet But all my feelings They don't matter And now I'm lost Lost anywhere In (the) nowhere |
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24.06.2009, 15:20 | #4 |
Dank euch beiden, dass ihr mein doch eher schlechtes Englisch verbessert habt.
Da ich's ja nicht mehr ändern kann, werde ich das hier gleich nochmal verbessert posten. Liebe Grüße Athariel |
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